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are you not?

Are You Not?

Are you not bored with this tired rhetoric? This complicit?
The dried husks of reproductions of meaningless sums?
Do you not digest them with such distaste? Such rancour?
An acrimonious sentiment as bland and unappealing as the last.
Do you not?
Do you not feel resented, passionless?
Or
Inspired?
I do. In almost equal measure.

They divulge in the desiccated resentment that is home to
Crusty old librarians.
An oral diuretic for the disenchanted so that they can truly verbalise
“I ain’t gettin’ any”.

They are the ones; the fervour-less, obsessive, spitefulls.
Un-zealous catechisms of a New World
Polygamysation of philosophies;
Dehumanised, desensitised, dried out,
Dusted and left to rot with the recycling.

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  • Brian Balzer gold member
    September 18

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    No I am not.

    No, I am not bored with this rhetoric (if I understand the meaning correctly) I'm confused by this complicit! My husks of reproduction have produced fruit so I do not digest them with distaste or view them with such rancour (if I understand that one too). An acrimonious sentiment-
    is lost upon me...still don't have a dictionary. I have felt resented and passionless but those times have passed
    , for a new insperation I finally grasped. Divulged in the desiccated resentment that is home- I would understand better if a dictionary I owned.
    An oral diurectic for the disenchanted? Back in a dictionary my eyes would be planted. Does that have an impact on "ain't gettin' any"? Because if it doesn't then I understand plenty! For your last stanza, I'm back in the book. Three or four times you'd make me look. Your over all meaning I see as disgust.
    But you could tone it down for dummies like us!
    Now I'll admit my ignorance is scary...
    Man do I need a new dictionary!
    huh? yes, ok, yes, yes, maybe, what?, oh., yes., no...ok.
    He answered your questions, all in a row...
    but back to his dictionary he had to go!

  • poem
    August 30
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    huh?
    yes
    ok
    yes
    yes
    maybe
    what?
    oh. yes.
    no


    ok.


    • dirty clean poet
      August 30
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      very... helpful critique?
      i think your comment made as much sense to me as my poem made to you... but thanks for reading it


      dcp
      xxx