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Truth Called and I Finally Saw You

SHOULD I STAY? SHOULD I GO?.......BY THE TIME THE QUESTION IS FORMED.....WE ALREADY KNOW!

THE WORRY THAT OPPOSES CREATIVITY...FALL AWAY FROM THE CITY.....
THAT SPEEDS IN MY MIND.....AND I FIND....THAT THE LIMITATIONS I PERCIEVE......ARE NOTHING MORE THAN TRICKS UP SLEEVES......
THAT TIME PROVIDES AS EXAMPLES......EXPERIENCE BECOME OUR MANTLES.....
HOLDING UP TROPHIES OF LESSONS LEARNED.....OR BRIDGES BURNED......
WE CAN TAKE ANOTHER ROUTE....ONE GROUNDED IN TRUTH.....
MAYBE ANOTHER DAY OLD CROSSINGS MAY BE REBUILT.... IN THE WIND IS DESPERATION AND GUILT.....
NOW TRAVELLING..... IN ANOTHER DIRECTION.....BECAUSE THE SIGNS I FOLLOW LEAD TO AFFECTION OF....
SELF....
NO HELP?....
THAT'S FINE

MY! SELF-RELIANCE.... HE! SEES AS DEFIANCE....

AGAINST FAMILIAR HABITTS WE SET IN SAND.....FREEWILL SUFFERS WHEN IT'S "ON DEMAND"....
SO I SEEK TO FIND THE ME THAT GOT LOST IN HIM......THE MAP I CHECKED HAD NO PICTURE..."WITHIN"
AS WOMEN WE FORGET THAT EMOTIONS ARE SIGNALS.....LETTING US KNOW THE NATURE OF WHAT WERE INTO
AND WHEN WE IGNORE......WE AGREE TO SOME MORE.....
OF WHATEVER THAT CALLED DOWN THE RAIN....
THOSE TEARS....
THIS PAIN!
HELL NO IT AINT IN VAIN.....

MY FINGERS SLIDE SO GENTLE AND SLOW.....STILL GRASPING THE CYCLE BUT DETERMINED TO LET IT GO
MY CELLY WILL RING WHEN THE LIE CALLS......I WILL NO LONGER ANSWER TO MY DOWNFALLS......
HE WILL TRY TO FIND ME AND SEE... THE BRIDGE HAS BEEN BURNED.....AND PUT OUR LOVE ON HIS MANTLE AS A LESSON LEARNED

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  • tirwander silver member
    September 25

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    Liked this one very much. I didn't know if I was into the form and CAPS at first but it works with this poem. I like the extra exclamation points after certain words in order to emphasize. Well done :-)

  • Brian Balzer gold member
    September 12

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    Interesting

    I like the title. I've never heard it phrased quite so well. I've had truth call several times during my life and finally saw the person I was with for who or should I saw what they really were. I like the way it flows. I like the line of I will no longer answer to my downfalls. To me that says I shouldn't have to defend every little mistake I make. The ending is fitting, but they don't always learn anything. One last thing I have to say I LOVE your border, too cool!

  • rhythmdivine
    September 2

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    Hey ms.sunshine

    I could see your verses bloom despite all the gloom..You got me absorbed in every line that were so corresponding to that of mine or could have been to any x and y..Blame it on the women species for the deep emotion thats so endowed to be poignant..I call it an intelligent gift..the self reliance that you got in.. the title is pretty adoring to rightly justify your poem so nicely done with a remarkable flow..Loved the line "The bridge has been burned..and pur our love on his mantle as a lesson learned" and the title ofcourse..So well knit and so original..


    Thanks for sharing and keep writing.