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Surrender





I
will be your slave
so you can surrender to me
and let me have your way

say
you’ll wear these chains
let me strip you
to the bone
and lay your feelings
bare

wear
this blindfold
so nobody can see
your spirit
escaping
soaring
flying free
above the bed
I’ve strapped you to

place
yourself in my hands

watch
the demands of the world
and the cares of the day
just slip away
dissolve

there’s simply nothing
you can do
but surrender
to the strength of my resolve
to torture you
with pleasures

smell
the leather
feel it press so tight
against your skin
the sting so sweet
you’ll beg for it again

no need
to wonder ‘if’
just ponder ‘when?’

Surrender to me

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  • scribbledthoughts
    September 6

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    hey, I had one of this title, a long time ago!

    John, it was a good thing I was hanging out here in sharepo this morning, I found this erotic side of you, haha. And I think it is a good shift from your usual intellectual/romantic faces. A few like this every now and then will keep me coming back here

    Kidding aside, here's my favorite part in this poem:

    wear
    this blindfold
    so nobody can see
    your spirit
    escaping
    soaring
    flying free
    above the bed
    I’ve strapped you to

    LOL, not for the blindfold and the straps, but for the good blend of realistic and poetic sides of "spirit escaping when you surrender". I wonder why I relate to it too much...... LOL!

    Well, this is a refreshing (?!?!?!) read. Thanks John, talk to you soon.

    Lynne


    • Windhover silver member
      September 7
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      Hi Sensoredthoughts!

      Hey Sensoredthoughts! While you've been away I've been a VERY naughty boy as my 'erotica' list will reveal. But you're not allowed look - okay? Hey Lynne, nice to see you visiting and thanks for stopping by. Glad you liked this and thanks for saying so. J