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Closer To Reality

Get close
Now closer
Into the mind of my lunacy then
I'll tell you why we don't belong.
Because we are different
and irrelevantly so
because the point is,
we don't exist.
It will all change.
If we dont change with it,
we are not here
we are not sane
we are not right, so to speak.
So move on, just be as you are
but dont believe, you belong.
Dont dance free to your own beat
without knowing the consequences.

LUNACY! We have it!
But Solutions, they Don't.
Taking away our right to look like..LUNACY
Won't change who we are

We are not here to be them
We are not here to be "sane"
We are not here to correct
We are here to be real

Get close.
even closer,
don't you run!
Be strong.
LUNACY!
Can't be taken.
LUNACY!
Can't be stopped.
Because the point is.
We Will Never be them.
We Will Never be sane.
We Will Never belong.
Because our minds

Are closer

To reality.

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  • Brian Balzer gold member
    September 11

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    Thought provoking

    It seems to me this poem says that if you aren't just like everyone else then you don't matter. Sure feels that way sometimes doesn't it? I like the last part. We are not here to be what others think we should be. I like the way you put sane in qoutes indicating you are refering to what they consider "sane". Be who you are meant to be. That is be who you are inside. Forget anyone who doesn't like it.