There once was a boy born hollow and vacant,
With skin made of bark, but nothing within.
His folks named him Marcus, Marcus the Giant,
For he grew to be tall with thick weighty skin.
Because of his size, because he was hollow,
Because he had skin which was made out of bark,
Nobody wanted to play with young Marcus
And nobody wanted to be his friend.
They all stood around to watch Marcus grow,
And behind closed doors they would remark
How scarily frightful, how damaged and spiteful,
How mean and forbidding young Marcus could be.
But of course this was rot, lies and deception,
For Marcus the Giant wasn’t like this at all.
The kids were just scared by their perception
Of young wooded Marcus, so abnormally tall.
But all was not lost for young Marcus the Giant,
For Rita Rosita soon moved in next door.
She was a girl with lilies for fingers,
With carnation eardrums and rose petal hair.
They soon fell in love, the tree and the girl-plant,
And never did two lovers so completely adore
One another as much as this botanical pair.
Together they grew a forest of children,
And those children played together forever and more.
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The odd child out.
This depicts the way too many people are treated in life simply because they are different. I see the poor boy as empty and uncaring or at least seemingly so, not appearing to let any thing get to him. Because he was differnt the other children wouldn't play with him and talked bad about him behind his back. Sadly typical among children. Lucky for Marcus the Giant that Rita Rosita moved in next door. I love the descriptive way you described this petite girl. What a perfect description of the two as a couple - botanical pair. Not to mention the -forest of children- nice touch. This is a wonderful fairytail love story. Well done.
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that amazing i love it!
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dcp - this jumps right a long with a great sense of rhythm, feels like it rhymes even though it doesn't. (Oops, sorry, just noticed your four line stanzas do rhyme, albeit slanted for the most part.) It feels to me like a combination of Grimm and Bob Dylan in his more folk-tale moments. Good one! MJ
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it fits to be a children's story ..its beautiful, wonderful imagery
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i really like the rythem and the rhymes - it reminds me a bit of roald dahl actually. the words are also really imaginative and colourful like'botanical' and 'carnation eardrums'! lol return the favour? x
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Hey Dirty Clean
I'm a big fan of Tim Burton and I can see alot of him in this one. It's like a Disney fairy tale with a tim burton twist on it. I like the originality and the picture it paints, which it paints beautifully with great imagery. I immediately felt immersed into a world of magic and make-believe. Thank you for giving me back about 2 mins of my childhood LoL. I thought the originality was great, maybe getting rid of the author notes on this one would make it more impressive and seem more original to others. But that's just a suggestion, I also could argue that you should keep his name b/c he was the inspiration. This of course is up to you, good job though, very good job. Thanks for sharing and hope to hear from ya sometime.
TTYL
MM
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