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Simple Chemistry

Love is a chemical
That prowls within.
It waits for some cutie
To come by
Or drop in.

Like a drug it appears
To cross your wires.
To tickle your ears,
And create new sires.

Alas, love is flawed;
Not every cake rises.
Here’s what to do
In times of such crisis.

What to do....
What to do....
Once all’s been lost?
When your hearts desires
Are tumbled and tossed?

The answer is here
The truth I tell.......

Do a shot!!
Tip the bartender well.

Have another!!!
So they’ll ring the bell!

Toast and toast again
For your hearts lament.
Till over the toilet
You find yourself bent.

Repeat their name
With every retch
Till The Porcelain Gods’
Attention you fetch.

That scream that you hear.....
Flush away, with the pain.
Then get on your feet
And start over again

A lesson learned
That you’ll never forget...
There’s a solvent that bathes
Away the regret.

AS DEEP AS YOU WANT

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Reviews

  • dave ochs silver member
    September 6
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    hey algoressister

    good to see you againg its been awhile, hey are you al gore's sister?

    anyway most of the time rhyme doesn't work for me, but this was perfect...maybe because of the humor and lighthearted manner of the poem, should be Hallmark (altought this is much better) for the recently broke up.
    dave

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  • zimgir165
    September 8

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    It didn't seem to flow

    I liked the poem, just the rhyming was too... I guess you could say confined. Just that some of the lines need to be a tad longer to go with the flow. It is a nice poem how it is though! I love it! Keep writing!

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  • Brian Balzer gold member
    September 11

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    Nice rhythme

    I personally write mainly in rhythm and rhyme so I liked that aspect of it. I probably would have put To come by or drop in on one line, but I think maybe you did that to create a pause but I'm not sure. I'm also not sure what the message is. I guess it's saying to just get drunk over and over to deal with, or not deal with, the problem. I just can't tell if it's really recommending it or if it's sarcasam

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  • blazingleo
    September 12
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    nice

    Taking recourse to drink is not the other way out.The tone of the poem is fitting the poem.
    Go out and find a replacement .No one's indispensable.Face upto things and move on.I like the lines not every cake rises .Acceptance is the ultimate reality.The poem is nice.

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