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Erotic Human Nature

Desires of lust
As you, caress my bust.
Feeling your depth within
Pushing forward and back again

Whispers and moans in the air
Fucking me here, then there.
I love the passion in your stare.
And the words you whisper in my ear

Im on my knees
from behind , you please.
On the chair.
Then on the floor.
Oh how i beg you for more.

You slide me down in between your legs.
I love watching, how your cock begs.
So hard i feel it throb.
You grinning as you watch my head bob.

Erotically you stare in my eyes.
And tell me to go ahead, and spread my thighs.
And to your wish, i comply.

You Devour my wetness.
Sending into an erotic bliss.
I cannot believe we are doing this!

We no longer want to stall.
So back up into your lap, i crawl.
I grind my hips into yours.
Everything begins to get sore.

You finally climax
And in my arms, you collapse
I smile, and tell you to relax.

I put my fingers in between my thighs.
And tell you to open up your eyes.
Surprise!
You grin, watching me sin.
My fingers go out, and in.

I close my eyes and bite my lip.
My wetness starts to drip.
In Ecstasy i start to trip..

I fell on top of you, And our bodies became two.
Then Gently on my lips you suck.
And whisper in my ears,
"Thanks for the great fuck"

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Comments

  • dave ochs silver member
    September 22

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    hey shortcake

    some women and a few men have written erotica on this site, i think its difficult, and a lot of it is tepid (luke-warm) this was hot, might be considered more porn than poem but so what.
    dave


    • shortshortcake
      September 23
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      Erotic Human Nature

      Well thank you for the comment.
      The intention behind the poem was to be as erotic as possible. I was going for hot. So im glad to see i got it on target.
      Porn-ish..? Yeah i'd agree. But thats what makes it fun.

  • Brian Balzer gold member
    September 18

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    Would YOU have done That?



    Would you have done that in a car?
    Would you have done that upon a bar?
    Would you have done that on a train?
    Would you have done that in the rain?
    Would you have done that on a farm?
    Would you have done that in a barn?
    Would you, could you on a horse?
    Does that take talant? Yes ofcourse.
    I have done that in a car!
    I have done that upon a bar!
    I have done that on a train!
    I have done that in the rain!
    I have done that on a farm!
    I have done that in a barn!
    I have done that on a horse!
    We both fell off, got hurt ofcourse!
    Now my friend would you believe...
    I've even done that in a tree!