in the gutter
it battles away.
in the sky
it falls in vain.
in the clouds
it drifts, at bay.
the quiet drip
the subtle splash
the gentle flow
the slow descent
the cool relief
the soothing warmth
the infinite beauty
of water.
Reviews
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for your 'first' poem, it's not bad. you should practice some more and i'd be more than happy to give you input.
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Your first?
I'm inclined. It's a good start. It simple and simple can be good. Sometimes there's such a thing as too much. You have to find that balance in between not enough and too much. This could use a little more descriptive substance but like I said it's a good start. Keep doing just what you did. Set down and write they don't all have to be a Mona Lisa.
September 17
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