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Steering with Love and Peace

The locomotive of the body
Overindulges at a superfluous speed at times
And retards while in commotion
Or simply stands still without any notion
Subsequently sometimes
The power drains out
with just an extra mileage of the psyche

We need to restrain the emotional accelerator
Preserve the pace of our action
Apply the hand brake at the appropriate moment
Watch the signals of life and proceed with the caution

Gear up Dude ..
Its all about steering with love and peace in the life’s drive
Undoubtedly, the very powerful fuel and the most wanted tool in the journey of life..

Happy Driving Evermore....

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  • Robin Greene
    September 19
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    A diiferent way of looking at life!!!

    On the whole it was thoughtful and a different way of looking out on life. The only bit I didn't like because I felt it did not fit an excellent piece of thought was the line:
    'Gear up Dude...'

    But then this could age setting in with this form of terminology.

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    • rhythmdivine
      September 23
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      Glad to see your comments Robin..I must mention, I deliberately used the phrase 'Gear up Dude'to plunge in one of the mechanisms of driving the car as you see I am here comparing the 'living life' with driving a car..nevertheless it initially did make me feel a way out of the tone..But thats being a bold driver

  • Brian Balzer gold member
    September 18

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    Metaphoricly speaking...

    You have driven your point home. I'm not the best with metaphors but even to me this is perfectly clear. My favorite line is - We need to slow the emotional accelorator - don't let your emotions get out of control.
    If it had not been for it's placement your use of the word superfluous would have have one more word to push me to replace my electronic dictionary. This a well told little story that has a very good moral. Nice Job

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    • rhythmdivine
      September 19

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      Thanks a lot for those thoughtul comments..Glad you could appreciate the theme and the phrases especially the emotional accelerator..thats my favourite too..Its an add on pleasure to see a reader striking the same right cord with the poet's idea..I dont remember to have gone through any of your peice of art..will surely catch up with your work soon..the title of the one featured seems quite alluring..
      Thanks again and keep writing

      RhythmDivine