I like, like
far better than
I like love
you can like
a person, or two
or ten
but it’s just about
a darn crime
if you love someone
other than the person
you’re in love with
and love is so serious
and sacred
and for all of eternity
but you can throw
like around
like confetti
then love is always
being tested
to see if it’s true
did you remember
to send flowers
on birthdays, holidays,
anniversary’s
and every so often
on an ordinary day
just to show
how much
you love and care?
would you sacrifice
Sunday football and
Tuesday night bowling
for the one you love?
anyway it’s a lot more fun
waking up with someone
you like in the morning
and slip into your clothes
and tell them, you’ll call
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I really enjoyed this poem, for its honesty and simplicity, made you really think and laugh a little, i think the choice of wording is perfect to convey your theme but i think it would be easier for the reader if you paid a little more attention to punctuation, that way the reader gets the points easier from the clever lines otherwise
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hey samets
thanks for reading and commenting,
dave
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Wonderful
I just loved this, it was so thought provoking. I really Like the subject matter, and the honesty within the content. You are so right on with this...when you said "then love is always
being tested
to see if it’s true"
again your right, we generally don't have to test like, like we think we have to test love, for whatever messed up reason we do. I think this was just awesome and honest....good job!
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hey ginger
thanks so much for your comments. if you can't be honest in poetry, where can you be. btw, Like your pic.
dave
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I find so much truth in your words.
Why is it that I love Love so much and yet I've been so much happier when I was in like? You explain this situation very well. I think in some states it Is criminal to Love someone other than the one you're in love with or is that if you Like someone other than you're in love with? Anyway about it I understand where you're coming from on this one. Sure you could've worked it a little harder like I could've so many of mine. But hey, they don't all have to be literary works of art. Do they? Can't we just write for the enjoyment of it? Well, I liked it and maybe even loved it a little. The only thing I wasn't crazy about was all the {and}s at the beginnings of the lines. They seem unnecessary but that's irrelevant. They didn't make me break off the relationship I was having with the poem.
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thanks brian
yeah, i guess love sets so high a bar, its hard to live up to. kind of frivoulous poem i guess so the frivolous style is appropo. rather than refine poems i prefer to go on to the next. the real energy is in the creation, not fretting over comma's and other trivia.
dave
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thanx God I have good friends
Dave,
i like love a whole lot more. it's getting someone to love ya that's the hard part. but it goes both ways. personally, i'd rather be wholeheartedly in love and passionate, than keep a distant liking, err, lusting relationship. besides, good friends give me a whole lot more than a physical touch; what I don't get with a mere liking. I thank God I have good friends, cuz I totally bombed a huge major-related assignment, but my friends were there to cheer me up.
say, you're a pretty likable guy, yourself.
best,
Pap
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hey pap
if you know you like love better than like, than i'm no one to tell you what you should like...errr, prefer. but anyhow thanks for the review and the kind words.
dave
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wish i could have liked as i wanted to...
hello, dave...i'm back..
well, partially that is...i'm too darned busy to be really into SP right now...still have a lot of backlog jobs to attend to...but, i just wanted to check out what you had for us all here...
and...as always, you don't disappoint...i like this like very much...hehehe...and, i know what you mean exactly...just wish i had liked more because when i was younger, i kinda flitted around and didn't stay that long to like that much...but, when i loved...i loved hard, still do as it matters, to the point of sacrificing quite a lot (my poems would tell anyone that
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hey leigh
thanks, i suppose part of growing up is giving up like for love. i read about how busy you are in the forum and i feel bad that your stressed and so busy. its nice when you have time to waste here on sharepo. anyway hope things slow down cause we like you a lot.
dave
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Drole
Classic drollery from the jaundiced Professor Ochs. I reckon you might have worked this very promising poetical premise a little harder but what DID make it to the page was worth the read. That comma on the first line is inappropriate and I reckon you'd have been better giving the second 'like' a line to its own to set up the rest of the poem. Gave me smile, as always. >W< -
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hey john
man, i thought poetry was for slackers like me, i tend to agree this could have been worked harder, but its that god damn muses fault, she's been flighty lately.
dave
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very touching- i love the idea of knowing so many people but having that one person whom you'd sacrifice everything for.
i like the loose structure as well- too ofen will a poet force something into a complex rhyme and strict rhythm that's detremental to the imagery
dcp
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hey clean dirty poet
thanks for commenting
dave
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Good to read you after all this while! This one was as blunt as you can be. A satirical take on love... well, i agree, its stressful to be in love!
I love the third stanza. Now, I don't throw around confetti all that much, but it sure is a funny picture in my head.
A point maybe, in the second last para dont you mean "like" instead on "love". I mean, if it was meant to be a rhetorical question, it should be "like".
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hey himanshumodi
thanks for the read, good to hear from you, i'll have to check out if like works better than love in yet another instance.
dave
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