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steps

silver worlds in a soft universe

ground that sinks beneath you feet

pulling you into it's embrace

warm, gentle, suffocating

it feels so good

numbed to danger

drawn in by sweet caresses

the air is a heavy purple

it sticks in your throat

like a sweet syrup,

liquid, like a course sand

chaffing as it cleanses

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