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Soul Trap

My entirety
Hidden within this life's mask
Never fully seen
Until the day my soul flies
Then will I truly exist

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I leave the ending without any punctuation so as to leave it open... is it a statement? or a question?

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  • Rainbug
    October 6
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    The title wonderfly describes the poem. But is it trapped? Or free? First line I feel ties us to the importance of the soul. Very intersestin ending...It does make one think. It does make it hard to understand what you are feeling behind it, but maybe that is what you wanted? More questions surrounding the mysterious poem...It could have many answers.

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  • Brian Balzer gold member
    September 30
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    Inner reflection,

    are we really what we are or is that just what we appear to be?


  • Enoq gold member
    September 28
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    Nice

    Succinct but true