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What If We Are Completely Wrong?

What if we are completely wrong
And life is nothing that it seems?
All the theories we cannot prove
What says they are remotely close?
What if all our equations
Just fit it all by chance?
The same chance that
Could create the human race
In an infinite universe
With infinite possibilities?
What if it's not a universe at all?
Couldn't we just as easily be
Part of a larger living organism?
Living on one of the billions of cells
That make up it's existence?
Both possible and plausible
Nothing could disprove it.
What if we are all just a part
Of one persons comatose dreams
And you are the only truly self-aware one?
Could we not just as easily be
Characters in a superbly advanced
Simulation game being played by someone?
Self-aware biological A.I.?
Sound crazy?
Of course!
But can you disprove any of it?

Author notes

I know, wow... this one is out there... just kind of a rambling poem of things I find fun to ponder. haha is the structure really bad?

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  • annie leigh
    November 24
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    Wow...

    I used to think this way too, though moreso when I was....7. I guess it was mature thinking, because this honestly is....very...I can't even put it into words. Just something about it. Very well written. I would say more but I have to get off.

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  • Dirty and Broken
    November 6

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    thinking about this stuff makes my brain hurt...like thinking about nothingness or the end of the universe....
    but i won't get started on that or i'll write the longest, msot rambling comment EVER
    anyways, i like the poem, i just think it's overplayed, overthought concept....but i DO like how you say we could be parts of a larger organism, or living on a cell...i've never heard those before.....

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    • tirwander silver member
      November 6
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      Thanks

      Haha, those are the exact examples I give people for how my brain feels when I think about this stuff. Trying to imagine nothing... or infinite too... or the universe having no end maybe? how does that work? ah, ok, yeah that feeling is starting lol.

  • bowmore bill
    October 26

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    great questions

    Hi Tirwander, questions we havw all asked ourselves at one time or another.
    I guess that in order to answer them we would have to be the creator himself...providing of course there actualty is a creator.

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  • facethejam
    October 24

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    i've always found the little quote "perception is reality" to be interesting, and this poem is really thought provoking in that aspect. fun stuff!

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  • gingerhall1976 silver member
    October 15

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    I too enjoyed this read

    you know it is out there but you are right, anything is possible, its all in the way you look at it, and rationalize your own existence. What a fun and imaginative idea to write about. This pulled me in and kept me till the end, I don't think anything was "really bad", in regards to your authors notes. Well done, definitely thought provoking, and as Enoq said, thanks for posting.

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  • Enoq gold member
    September 29

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    More of a rant

    A fun rant for sure. I think we have all had this conversation either during a cannabis partake or not. I enjoyed it and can relate to the thought.

    In my opinion life is just a biochemical reaction to the surrounding stimulae of a stable ecosphere. The ecosphere is an elemental eventuality in a seemingly infinite universe. Which seems to fall under this poems possibles. Fun read indeed thank you for posting.

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  • Brian Balzer gold member
    September 29

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    Second try to comment on this one.

    I think a lot of people think like this at some point. What do we believe? What is real? What if all our equations just fit by chance. When I'm working on my car I might pick up a bolt that will screw in just fine. That doesn't mean it's supposed to go there. It just happened to fit. This poem brought to mind the movie Men In Black. There's the little world in the airport locker and in the end he shows him our world is inside a locker.
    Then that world is inside a marble and...
    As to the structure of the lack of it. I think it's fine like it is. It seems to work. Yes it's out there. But isn't that a good thing? Break free of the norm.

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  • Miss O Malley
    September 29

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    What if we are all just a part
    Of one persons comatose dreams

    my favorite line so far. i've felt like that a million times. as if i was just a dream and not a real person. and when i dreamed, i was just a dreaming person inside another's dream. the structure is just blunt, not fancy, but that's what makes it more understandable. I read it like rant so that's what it should look like.

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