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Thinking Of You

Ah what fun, to lie in the sun;
with nothing to do,except think or you.
How nice it is, warm and carefree;
I only wish you were here with me.

So blissful it is, to just kick back
I envision your beauty and simply relax
then the vision disperses and reality's back.

It takes only seconds to fade back to the dream
then we're together on a deserted beach.
We're holding each other while we softly kiss
then reality's back and it's your touch I miss.

Before I can return, the page has been turned
I'm now rubbing lotion on your back's light sunburn.
I'm not evev sure if I have felt
your true burning desire which would make me melt.

You're a hot fallen angel of this I'm quite sure
because you made it so easy for me to get Burned.
But thanks anyway, I needed it I must say.

Author notes

Just transplanting some of my teenage mush.

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