Staring at my fuzzy walls,
They are breathing,
Pulsing in and out,
Prisms formed at each corner.
I plan to visit her tonight,
I have been away too long,
The lack of guidance,
It leaves me feeling empty.
I lay on my back,
I close my eyes,
Into the darkness,
Changing shapes appear.
Writhing and dancing,
While changing colors,
Eventually forms are taken,
I see who I've waited for.
Around me are trees,
A giant lotus flower,
Centered at the end,
Of a crudely worn path.
My guide sits so calm,
Eyes closed yet able to see,
What surrounds her,
From every inevitable angle.
Light rustling of leaves,
A calm breeze blows past,
Face cooled by its touch,
Forward I slowly glide.
No need for walking here,
Not sure if I have feet,
Not of importance,
I am getting closer.
I see her shift slightly,
She's aware of my arrival,
A slight smile forms,
She begins to speak.
Into my head her voice,
Calming and sweet,
She speaks so softly,
Yet I hear so clearly.
Her words this visit,
Are "Love, Give, Calm",
I take them in and absorb,
Feel them to cover me.
This is all I need,
She knows,
She blows me a kiss,
The forest dissolves.
I see myself lying,
I am watching from atop,
I am slowly lowering,
Finally back inside.
Eyes open,
Everything still,
Refreshed and ready,
My world is balanced.
Author notes
I know it's long.... lol so thanks if you read the whole thing :-)
Comments
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Shroom With a View!
The pulsating aspect of psilocybin intake adds to the descriptive quality of the work.
I would like to ask if you wrote this "under the influence" but such a query might be tactless. heheh.
I liked the way the trip evolves as a kind of shamanic undertaking with hints of Gaia or The Sacred Feminine as Mr Backwards inquires of below.
Anyway its the perfect vision to have lying on your back out in nature, awash with the scents of forest and vale.
Nice one, mate.
Cheers
gG
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i love it. perfect choice of words and everything. i can picture the tie dye of the blackness, the guide (reminds me of buddah), and the sort of resurrection (?) of the person at the end.. Rewarded 4
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psilocubes are indeed nice motivational tools... this conveys the feelings of a shroom trip quite nicely.
as this must be personal, there's only so much one can say about it... it seems very complete, so criticism would be me trying to find something wrong with it. I'm not sure what to say, like after I have tripped myself. You've expressed something difficult to express.
If I could ask one question, it would be what the woman in here represents... the sacred feminine, perhaps? just speculation.
favorite lines
"Writhing and dancing,
While changing colors"
"My world is balanced. "
starts strong. ends strong. good body. a very nice piece.
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My guide sits so calm,
Eyes closed yet able to see,
What surrounds her,
From every inevitable angle.
so this girl is like some sort of Buddha who brinds enlightenment. that how i took it. very serene feeling. nice! and the mushroom setting just made everything even much more serence cuz i think of the soft part underneath it. cool!
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Teehee, lovin' the shrooms? XD I like that!
It is long, yes, and I agree...punctuation will help add emphasis and slow the reader. You're good with descriptions and create a nice picture. And the reader can tell how relaxed you are through your line length and word usage.
nicely done,
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I think you are a terrific writer, the entire poem is just so clear in its image by choice of words, only thing i can suggest is try adding punctuation, it is not that long of a poem relatively speaking, punctuation will slow your reader down and really make them ponder each line longer
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thanks for the reccomendation and complements. :-) I added the punctuation. I like it better. -
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I love Mushroom Meditations, but I am confused. It's not your fault; I've missed the point before. Is this poem taken from your perspective as a mushroom? Is this poem from the mushroom's point of view? Sorry to be so dumb, but that's what I thought. I'll read it again to see if it clicks. It is a very enjoyable poem by the way!
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