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David

There was a young boy named David
whose parents were always quite livid.
Young David was very bold
he didn't do as he was told.
David had several bad habits.
If he wanted something he'd grab it.
He'd run, cry and shout.
He'd throw things about.
He'd put almost anything into his mouth.
Then his parent could not get it back out.
One day he started screamin'
like he was possesed by a demon.
His mom asked why he was yelling.
His dad said there was no telling.
Then they noticed that his cheek was swelling.
As young David's bad luck would have it
he had seen something and grabbed it.
He quickly shoved it in his mouth
then began to swish it about.
That was why he was screaming, you see...
the thing in his mouth was a very mad bee!

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Just a little something for fun.

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Comments

  • cee gold member
    November 1
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    What can I say.. Karma!

  • courage is hope gold member
    October 15

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    ha ha

    I don't know why, but it reminds me of the terrible two's... lol

    I like it though!

    Keep writing,
    Hope.

    • Brian Balzer gold member
      October 15
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      Funny,

      That could very well be the age group he's in. I was thinking of a child in that area when I wrote it. Thanks.