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Maybe Tomarrow

Maybe tommarow I'll live out my dreams
Maybe tomarrow you'll know what I mean

Maybe Tomarrow I'll fall into line
Maybe tomarrow you will be mine

Maybe tomarrow my life life will turn around
Maybe tomarrow white flowers abound

Maybe tomarrow I'll live again
Maybe tomarrow I'll call you my friend

Maybe tomarrow I'll hike up my skirt
And maybe tomarrow I'll show you what I'm worth

Does the repeating first phrase make the poem boring?

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  • MaybeTomarrow
    October 10
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    THNX AC

    THnx AC! I SPELLED TOMARROW WRONG!!!!!!!!!!!


  • ACpoetry
    October 10
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    Nice poem

    This one is short but sweet. It's wasn't half bad. One suggestion: Tomorrow is spelled like this.