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.Stubborn in a good way.

Some say I'm stubborn
which I have to say is true.

Stubbornly I refuse
what ever I think is cruel

You cannot make me do
Whatever I cannot stand

Stubbornness is my happiness
Of course it may be not to you

to let go of what I dream
Is impossible for me

The thing I most cling to
That I'm most stubborn about

Is happiness
I feed upon happiness

What I like is different
I am more different than you

I like humid
I like rain

I like the feeling
that drives most people insane

As the storm passes
I will stand

As fire burns my tender skin
I do not die of vain

I am stubborn anyways
but in a good way

I will stand upon a stormy cliff
just for the thrill

My friends will call me from afar
to tell me not to got so far

My friends would jump in after me
If I really do drown

But of course I wouldn't want them to
just in case they should fall in

I know I am stubborn
But in a good way

I will not give up
on anything

My dream is in my heart
My heart is in my soul

My soul is full of happiness
Happiness is where my stubbornness lay

I am stubborn
That cannot change

I am more stubborn than anyone
but a different stubborn

I am stubborn in a good way
I will not give up

I will keep on dreaming
I will not let go

I will make my dreams come true
I am going to make life go on

No matter what happens
I will make my life come true

Like a dream
but better

it is good to be stubborn
But in a certain good way

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  • super ray ray
    October 15, 2009

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    "you can not make me do
    whatever i can not stand."
    I love this line
    You are so fun.
    And I like this poem.
    Wish i had friends like that though.
    Good poem


  • spencershanequa
    June 8, 2009

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    "My dream is in my heart, my heart is in my soul"
    Beautiful discription and is very relatable. Bravo

  • Brian Balzer Greeters member
    March 15, 2009

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    Me too.

    I have a bit of a stubborn streak as well. I like the way you described how being stubborn can be a good thing. As a matter of fact there are things in life it is important to be stubborn about. I believe it can be a great quality. You have a great example of that. My favorite lines in fact, the third and fourth. There are a few things you might want to fix. First line - stay = say, line twenty four - I do not die of vain = I do not die in vain, line forty two - Happiness is where my stubbornness lay = Happiness is where my stubbornness lies.

  • Hanah gold member
    February 5, 2009

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    "My dream is my heart
    My heart is my soul" are my favorite lines .You've got some good lines in here.I like the positive feeling that I got from this poem .Nicely done !


    • celticsoul
      February 5, 2009
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      Thanks :D

      I was feeling very poetic when i wrote that. ( if you know when that mean ).

      I like to express my feelings and thoughts into my poems ( if i don't I couldn't write them.. )

      I am very stubborn... but sometimes it is good

      Thanks!

      Celtic


  • NoblePoetry silver member
    January 8, 2009

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    nicely put

    your poem sings of hope and love inspiration never give up. But sometimes we must give in.

    Good job young lady. Keep writing.

    language: 5, rhythm: 5, subject: 5, tone: 5, form: 5.


  • celticsoul
    January 7, 2009
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    Um...

    Woops.
    I wrote that at two in the morning..
    I better go fix all those spelling errors...

    (sigh)

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