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Dress Sense

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If thoughts were clothes
you'd dress to kill

your poems reveal them
like fine lingerie
their fabric showing
how they feel

your words are like jackboots
and high heels
the sound of your footfall
echoes in my head

and I'd love to be
between the covers
of your book


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  • mojojames
    January 22, 2009
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    John - Another fine piece of veiled (sic.) erotica. Jackboots and high heels, pretty lethal combination. And the ending is right square on target. I wonder about inverting the opening line, for some reason it seems like it stresses murderous intent more than how it sits now, maybe because it's parallel in syntax or word order with the second line. Just a thought. Good one, Cheers, MJ


  • gnosisonG silver member
    January 21, 2009

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    Ballad Dressing!

    Hi W. This piece hides its barbed innerworkings well in my view.
    Beneath a melodic sentimental veneer, it appears to me to describe a rather formidable femme - one with a rigorous intellect and one certainly not to be trifled with.
    For some reason the decidedly kinky image of high-heeled jackboots goosestepping a cancan in a flurry of silken, tassled skirts invades my brain when I read this.
    (Too much caffeine you reckon?)
    Only slight reservation is the "..to be" in the last part. There seems to be an opportunity missed here for added intimacy of just what it is you would love to be doing between the sheaths.
    Nice one John.

    Warmest regards

    gGiddyup


  • rhetorica gold member
    January 20, 2009

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    love it,i wonder if you wrote the poem around the last verse,its almost too perfect of a conclusion.
    It leaves me curious as to who this writer is

    great poem Wind

    bye

    rhet

  • dave ochs gold member
    January 20, 2009

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    hey W

    sounds like flirting at the water cooler innuendo, or how bout the waitress at the diner. makes me want to know the girl and her words-like jackboots and high heels, now she must be one hell of a poet.
    dave