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Truth and lie

With the endless defeat

With the broken feet

I stand tall

Against the wall

Who let me down?

Who can you????

I say I win.

I win the moment I loose

I loose the moment

I missed my aim

For that only

Life is a game?

Numerous faces I make

Many times it made me shake

If a wordless word hurts

Make it senseful&#;?

Do the silence screams

Never let it

With the power of Ur

Broken dreams

Dreams r the songs Ur deeds r the themes

Make the night good with out these dreams

Present is plain

Do it have a depth

From where the Dusk starts it way to the dawn

Inside lies the truth.

But the TRUTH never LIES

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read and plz get real

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  • deep inside
    September 11, 2006

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    awesome

    its more of an inspiration, it makes you move beyond,away from negativity and lets you think over and go forward, like from the endless defeat to i say i win.
    i really liked the way you ve used the words,like broken feet,wordless word.
    there's lot of depth in your words , they look very straight but there's more meaning to it.

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