If the life is to think! I say its not, even when I am thinking over it just to answer this question
Musing my own mind
Playing with the words
Words to make a poem
Poem to rhyme the words
Words to make sense
Sense to express me
Me, who is a poet,
Poet of musing
Musing my own mind
Mind is made to think
Think what u can do
Do what u decide
Decide how to get on this
This means this poem
Poem with rhymes
Rhymes without any sense
Sense what I express
Express what u feel
Feel and reveal the next
Next
Next that is one more reader
Reader who is one of the greatest foolS of this world
Author notes
do not mind any way
R u wearing a grin?
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I like the flow of consciousness of this. And it sums up what we feel as poets - how it's about us, what's inside, feelings - whether we rhyme or not. The thought flow is circular so that you go full circle at the end to where you were at the beginning. I think the format is very original and I like that. It is symbolic of the flow our your thoughts. I wouldn't change anything, I like it the way it is. Yes, I'm wearing a grin - I got a kick out of it. It was an enjoyable, fun read. Nice job!
Butterfly
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How True...!
Dear Cactus,
I go with your idea that 'readers are fool in this world'!
I don't want to universalize... Yes, most of the writers are successful for they consider their readers fools! You have brought to light the stark reality in a new way! Creative is the structure you employed.
Different one!
KC
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Perfect
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awesome
lovely work i liked ur writing style
ur own thoughts of writing a poem and how to actually write
a poem made a fabolous piece
very rare do i see this kinda of work
with no forced love experiences and emotions
mind... its contradictions... thoughts of gettin the things rite.. and eventually getting something so beautiful
awesome i m missin on the word to describe the feelin probably thats is y im repeatin my self
well awesome is the word i would use again
well done
keep writing
anu. Rewarded 4
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thanks for commenting but plz avoid sms language . i jst use it to make the words beautiful.
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this is great
very smart and witty, i like the style , it carries so much personality. -
intriguing
Cactus: Your "Don't Mind" made me smile -- I like it very much. The smile, I think, comes from your "take it or leave it" attitude about a poem you've just written, or -- in this one here -- are in the process of writing. I like that approach: here are my feelings, they're mine, if they reach you, fine, if not, no problem. You care about your poetry, but don't care all that much at the same time. To me, that's wisdom!
I like the form of the lines: end word becomes the first word, next line: a rolling text. I've never tried that myself, but I can imagine it took a lot of work. Suggestions: 1. Line 19, fell is better as feel
2. line 23: fool is better as fools. But those are minor typos.
Nice work, Cactus!. Rewarded 4
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this is good
i really like this it goes deep. however i dont really catch the meaning, im sure it has a really deep meaning to you and even though i dont catch it and i probably wont be the oinly one that shouldnt matter to you. you write because you have something to say. unless you are one of those people who doesnt want to write just to be published...
but from the quality of this i think your not.
good job!. Rewarded 4
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LOL!
That is a weird poem you got there, and some parts of it is quite right, although I would like to agree on to some of the people who actually comment on here, such as Zoi. Yeah some of it doesn't make any sense, but it has a nice flow with it. I'm quite hard to pleased as well.
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cool
I really would have liked it if I were not a teenager...but I can surely appreciate your idea even though it does not make any sense.. guess you'll have to try harder to impress a teeenager like me.. Rewarded 4
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Unusual
Cactus, This seems like a piece that was spun right off the top of your head. I enjoyed the musing and the playfulness of words, thoughts and doubt. I assume one should not take your meaning so seriously or feel that your critique of the reader be taken in vain.. Rewarded 4
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just a comment
liked your poem.......no grin I'm as wierd I can be...and I don't mind being called a fool....ultimately it's all about perception..... Rewarded 1
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Yes, i'm wearing a grin!
Grin that means something
something i cannot express
express, instead in a poem
poem formed in my mind
Mind that you left to wonder
wonder if it connects -- with this Grin!
LOve this and I don't mind at all!
c ya!
Lynne. Rewarded 1
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tahnk u
well i not in mood
mood of writing a poem
poem with same scheme
scheme of fools
fools i make
.............well read my others on allpoetry
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Yes, im wearing a grin
I thought this poem was VERY awsome! I just cant believe how good it turned out, meaning you must have put alot of thought into this poem cause some of this stuff is hard to understand but it goes together so well and i just love the style!!!! This was a very enjoyable poem to read and very whitty. Ive tried writing something like that but it turned into i bunch of jibber jabber lol you certainly pulled it off though awsome job!!! love the wacky writing!
~Natasha. Rewarded 1
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wierd in a good way
well im also new i have only just joined today...and im not sure how this works so im just gonna tell you what i think...this poem really got me thinking it is deep in a fascinating way it makes me wanna read every line over and over to make sure i havent missed anything i like the way its sort of twisted i feel likes it back to front or something maybe im just wierd ??who knows??. Rewarded 1
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well i like the way u starts everything with "well"(every comment).i really enjoyed the simple poetry of u and may be read them again next time i log in
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Interesting and Amusing
I am new at writing poetry, and I certainly can relate to the feelings here. Nice job!
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