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A Jack Of All Shades.

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A child prodigy gone
Wrong? A spoiled brat in a man’s
Body despoiled by wanton
Surgery? With hordes of fans


Who needs friends? Who needs groupies?
Groper in the dark who crossed
The riven Jordan with sleaze
Pained in coin for childhoods lost.


My cool moonstalker of Bubbles
Pale ghost of Motown´s Wizened brand
Wacko`s Soul soars high from trouble
For Pan will Never Never Land.

 

 

 

Author notes

On a spur of the moment upon hearing HIStory come to an end I threw out a lewd challenge which Rhetorica and Iphios answered with gusto and aplomb! My own take is slightly delayed, rather rushed and rather short but I felt I had to present an alternative in poetry terms to my worthy peers. Check out Rhets and Iphios poems if you haven`t already.
Cheers!

Blame it on the boogie?

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  • midnight51 gold member
    October 28, 2009
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    Chilling

    Yikes this is quite haunting. You have such a way with words to express feelings so poignantly. Chilling.

    Josh


    • gnosisonG silver member
      October 28, 2009
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      Thanx Mr Midnight!

      Yeah I guess theres no getting away from the creepier aspects of MJs satin-gloved hold on our collective consciousness. Thanx for your kind words, Josh. Cheers!

      Regards

      gG


  • William McGarvey gold member
    October 16, 2009

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    Hey gG,

    Long time…
    The pic really shocked me. I guess that is what he looked without makeup.
    You make a very good point here. Money and/or fame doesn’t bring happiness. I heard about a survey done a year or two ago about rating peoples happiness compared to their income. They used things like marital problems, alcohol and drug abuse etc. and it turned out that people with average incomes were the happiest.

    I have nothing against the mega star, I feel sorry for him. He never had a normal life and had a devastating effect.

    Take care gG, great write

    Bill


    • gnosisonG silver member
      October 28, 2009
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      Greetings William!

      Please excuse this tardy reply and thanx for bringing me out of the cryogenic state of inactive participation I`d sunk into of late.
      Twas uplifting I`m sure for any poets to hear that mid-income folks were happiest as poetry tends not to proffer pecuniary rewards. I suppose it goes to show there can be too much of a good thing and vast wealth certainly assisted in detaching MJ from some important factors of normal life. Thanx again, mate, owe you one.

      Cheers

      gG


  • kaety
    July 21, 2009
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    fraky pic dude, freaky pic.


  • Ludmila607
    July 15, 2009

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    This its cruelly great

    This its formally,poetically perfect.Really enjoyable .I really had to reaqd it three times.
    AS for the subject well it s all open to everyone sensibillity and respect to someone who was not any person but an Artist and Lonelyman wich nightmares and fears we can hardly undestand.
    Regards from Ludmila

    language: 4, rhythm: 5, subject: 2, tone: 3, form: 5.


    • gnosisonG silver member
      October 28, 2009
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      Cheers Ludmila!

      Sorry about the slow reply. I`ve been participating only by reading since June but hopefully Time and Muse will combine to deepen my efforts on this august site.
      I agree with you about how we as "normal" people have great difficulty in comprehending the nightmares and fears which drove Jacko ... well, wacko. He became his own image and lost himself in the process I think.
      Very good to hear from you again. I promise I won`t be a stranger!

      Warmest regards

      gG


  • swagger
    July 13, 2009
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    that picture is disturbing as hell. very fitting.

  • Frank E Gibbard
    July 10, 2009

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    Iconoclastic

    Yes very iconoclastic of a poular icon. I just tuned in & haven't read the others but want to comment on your efforts here G. I had thought of writing on MJ myself but wasn't brave to write frankly about him & speak my mind. It would have been about the crass hype media and racial specific beatification etc not the "poor" deceased star, not any mocking of the dead. I think I heard a preacher type (Al Sharpton?) say he in his coffin was the best human ever (you said what!!!???) unless I imagined it or words to that effect. That praise and its like was so OTT & quite nauseating anyway and I also heard any media criticism wrongly characterised by some black spokespeople as racism, the ultimate inevitable canard & refuge resorted to by such folk.
    On your poem gno' it is neatly assembled & hits the spot, it occurs to me your nom de plume sounds a bit like nose BTW... which is on my mind for some reason at this moment. I sh. have a go, I sh. be brave like you - Frank.


    • gnosisonG silver member
      July 10, 2009
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      It Takes One To Nose One!

      hahah noses indeed. Cheers Frank, good to see you back.
      The postumous accolades have assuredly been massively OTT but I suppose this fits in quite well with the media hyped virtuality of his life. I happened to glimpse a part of the sending-off show/extravaganza and I thought the choked words from Jackos daughter was way out of order - poor kid.
      I must say I am getting pretty sick of MJ music clogging the airwaves - he had some good songs for sure but not all have stood the test of time in my worthless opinion.
      Thanx for commenting, Frank, and give me a heads up when you finish your own MJ paean-in-the-arse!

      Warm regards

      nasalgGap


  • MagicSchoolbus
    July 1, 2009

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    Great Title!

    I don't approve off the bashing of any person who has recently... Only becuase of the familys.

    Im not here to tell you your in the wrong. In fact ima give you one thumbs up cause that picture freaked me out.

  • TallulahBelle
    June 29, 2009
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    G
    Very clever, a fun read, I liked.
    T


    • gnosisonG silver member
      June 29, 2009
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      Why, Spank You Very Much, TBelle!

      And a top of the morning to you from 630 am Norway! So glad you decided to stick around.

      Warmest regards

      gG


  • iphios
    June 29, 2009
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    Hey gG,

    This was nice. Subtle but covers all the bases. I love the play on words. Though short, it was worth the wait. But i have to say my favorite line was "For Pan will Never Never Land."

    You delve a bit into the psyche with your questions. I sometimes think you are better at 'psychology' than i am. Hats off to you gG.

    -iphios


    • gnosisonG silver member
      June 29, 2009
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      Cheers Iphios!

      Thanx for the compliment, though Hannibal Lector I aint! Heheh.
      The dichotomy of famous peoples media-mauled personalities is a fascinating subject for any head-shrinker whether layman or Siegmund and Jackson was certainly a head-case, part and parcel of being a talented phenom I guess.
      I thought you captured that fissure between his psyche and music really well in your poem.
      Yepp I believe the last line was the first I came up with and created the form which seeded the poem. Often the case and highly unprofessional! Did you get "My cool" (Michael) btw?

      We must do this again sometime!

      Warmest regards

      gG


  • Lainy66
    June 29, 2009

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    This is brilliant I love it, Great pic and I love the category you put it in haha But... Collaborating with Bubbles the Gimp OMG hahahahahahahahaha

    wipes away tears of laughter

    lainy


    • gnosisonG silver member
      June 29, 2009
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      Thanx Lainy!

      Good of you to notice the minor details. I always attempt to sprinkle a bit of perverted spice in the corners of my writes. Your smiles cause my own face to crease. Thanx again.

      Warm regards

      gGimpanzee


  • rhetorica gold member
    June 29, 2009

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    Hey gG, I think its shameful to write bad stuff about any superstar after they are dead...people should just let him rest in peace..

    Anyway, this poem is just great, i love your reference to "Jordan" and the "coin" he received for refusing to testify, $22,000,000 is an expensive sleep over..I love the double meaning in "Bubbles", which was the name of his chimp, and the fact he slept in an oxygen tank...the conclusion is also quite brilliant,

    "Wacko`s soul soars high from trouble
    for Pan will never never land"

    "riven" is a perfectly placed word,


    cheers gG....
    far better quality than mine,
    i hope others take the time to understand this piece, it disheartens me when i see a lot of your poems overlooked,
    every aspiring poet here can learn a lot by reading and trying to figure out even a tiny section of your writing

    rhet


    • gnosisonG silver member
      June 29, 2009
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      May He Rhest In Peace...

      (Not). Cheers Rhet. I had a whole set on baubles, babbling, banter with Bubbles but it didn`t fit the mold - reckon the retiring chimp chum deserves a poem on his own.

      The challenge here was fitting info in to the 7 syllable lines (8 on last), the ABAB rhyme and the enjambments - combining these with humour, wordplay and reflection without turning the whole exercise into meaningless mush.

      Thanx for the encouraging words, mate, but I don`t really feel my stuff is totally overlooked on this site. My peers here are virtually the only folks kind enough to read and comment on my scrawl (cue violin muzak!) and I`m not otherwise exactly spoiled for attention (emulating Rob Crusoe stuck in Friday`s village NOT being bumrushed by avid poetry perusers) in Norway.

      I get more hits than comments ratio-wise which is generally quite understandable in view of the age-average and at times arcane nature of some of my work.

      Cheers mate.

      gG

      PS: All quiet at the Transitorium

  • dave ochs silver member
    June 29, 2009

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    hey gG

    interesting take, definetely in your style. the refrences show you know a lot about him and this is critical yet sympathetic, its funny but love em or hate em apparantly he had quite an impact.
    dave


    • gnosisonG silver member
      June 29, 2009
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      Yeah...

      ...its difficult to escape the fact that due to mere media hype and his budding megalomania Jacko has become an integral fact of everyday "culture" pop or otherwise. Unavoidable.
      Personally I bought Off the Wall when it came out - not my usual fare but ok. Thriller was far too commercial however and I jumped off the bandwagon then. After that its just been a peripheral acquaintence, entertaining on the wackier side but cloying and nauseating on the sentimentalised popbollox side.
      I only wish I`d squeezed in a referance to "Blanket" but the best pisstake I\ve seen is South Parks brilliant episode.

      Cheers Dave

      gG

  • kittyeaglepig gold member
    June 29, 2009
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    I like the style. good stuff

    • gnosisonG silver member
      June 29, 2009
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      Thanx kittyeaglepig!

      To thee and thy whole menagerie!

      Regards

      gG

  • Aries
    June 29, 2009
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    Wow

    I loved Rhetorica's 'take' & your poem is a 'ripper'too
    You are both fantastic double WOW

    • gnosisonG silver member
      June 29, 2009
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      Cheers Aries!

      Nice of you to say so. Check out Iphios take also.
      Thanx again

      gG

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