Your kisses brand my soul
with a fire, blazingly hot,
it scalds me, yet leaving me
wanting for more.
Your touch moves me
with such intensity,
making me soar like
an eagle to the sky,
unabashedly reaching for passion's heights.
You fill my being to the very core
with a completeness that astounds me,
leaving me breathless, making me sigh,
lifting me high, up to the heavens.
And even as the midnight breeze
brushes my brow and cools my skin,
I can still feel the strength of emotions
running through my veins,
touched by the liquid fire of your love.
And even as you go,
your scent lingers...
leaving me with a pleasurable
awareness - of the next things to come,
of the future wonderful moments,
when you leave me with more
than what i hoped for.
Author notes
I wrote this after the "One Kiss". A continuation of a love affair (then anyway)...
Please tell me what you think...?
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This is a very good poem. I like your use of language and expressive style of writing, very emotional and easy to relate to. I really liked the line;
'You fill my being to the very core with a completeness that astounds me,leaving me breathless, making me sigh, lifting me high, up to the heavens.'
Anyway, beautiful poem.
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thank you so much, em...it means so much to me when somebody appreciates my poem...
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very powerful
very strong emotions that are displayed here in a very real, sensual but very sexy manner. Which is a good combination to have on your side when writing poetry such as this. Was "yourlove" supposed to be together like that? if not it's not a big deal at all, and if it is, I understand that too, but I wouldn't have used it in this poem. Or at least not there. Overall a good read about the steam before and about the boil.
TTYL
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very great feelings
you are deeply in love , you miss a lot . Knowing be left after a passionate kiss is very hard ! But looking forward to what may come let your heart hope !
A very nice and heartfelt writing !Thank you for sharing it !. Rewarded 4
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very great feelings
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excellent logic
Your poem will surely make a child to have a special night's sleep.great imaginary.good can do weel in future.my best wishes.pls comment on my poems too.bye!!. Rewarded 4
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good use of cliches
the poem is good , everything is in the right place. the form is alright, it flows well.
ok heres the thing i can feel the emotion that your trying to evoke but it doesnt come out entirely in the poem.
i have heard all these lines already, "your scent lingers; emotions running through my veins."
now the reson why i am commenting like this, please don't be offended, is mainly because i can sense that you are capabable of pulling of a really exeptional piece.
i think if this emotion that your trying to express is what your experiencing now then with a little concentration you would be able to get it jus right.
anyway that just what i thought, do with it whatever you want.. Rewarded 4
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hey i love the use of language...its excellent...you have brought oit out in a very vivid description and i congratulate you on doing....
the end of the followin line should be this...
line 18- your love..
keep writing. Rewarded 4
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Like it alot
Great use of line breaks. The conjugation in line fifteen should be brushes and cools. “Making me soar/like an eagle to the sky” is a bit cliché. Lose the ellipse in line twenty, it is unneeded. The title is ok, but I believe that it could be strengthened to match the power of the rest of your poem. Great tone and voice. Lose the yet in line three. Consider changing line thirteen to “lifting me up to the heavens” it’s less redundant.
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Good poem, but you would do well to shorten it. It feels a bit repetitive by the end.
I loved the first few lines but it seems like once you get inured to it, it becomes sort of drawl.
Your language is good, and like I said, the premis of this poem is wonderful.
Kudos.. Rewarded 4
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Sensuous..much like you are!!
Well, this is a very very good poem. One of the best I have read from you. I can hardly point out anything in this poem. You are just awesome this time. The words are just so suitable and strong. Language has such a good flow. Its flawless. The feelings associated with it, the anticipation, the contentness, the euphoria, the zenith of passion... you have just crunched everything into one poem lady. This is amazing. Magnificent, majestic, superb.
Though check line 15. Use "brushes" and "cools". Grammatical stuff you know. I think I should try teaching english in oxford.... good enough for it
. Anyways, keep writing.....n i will keep reviewing....Pratyush
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it is good
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