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Sirens

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We  spoke of sirens once -

how you saved us both.

I thought of you as a shipmate

who knew about ropes –

and false hopes 

I see things differently now

how

the one who tied me to my ship

was a singer of songs

so beautiful

that she herself – bled.

Never really considered

the agony of Odysseus tied.

The story lied.

Both he

and the mermaid

died that day .

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  • June 7, 2006

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    Another piece of brilliance

    Once again I am in awe.You have the skill of an artist in painting a picture in words leading the reader to follow each brushstroke from beginning to end.Another beautifully written read.  

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    • Windhover silver member
      June 8, 2006
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      Call my agent! Where's 'wardrobe'?

      Really Jay P you'll have to tone down these comments or I'll be smoking cigars and invading small countries! Glad you liked it , I particularly like this one myself , though I wasn't sure it would cross over for general consumption.Most gratifying that you thought it beautiful.The one star is a slap on the wrist for lionising me (but your cheque is in the post ! )

  • eosmia
    May 12, 2006

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    Beautiful

    One rarely sees references to any of the classics these days. You have used the Odyssey to make clear a present day pain. Both the rhythm and the metaphor really leads the reader through your personal journey.

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    • Windhover silver member
      May 14, 2006
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      Nice to meet you...

      .. and thanks for this comment. The demise of the classics from the school curriculum is a great loss in my opinion - and if the schoolboy I was could hear the schoolboy that I am now saying that , he'd fire his pea-shooter at me ! A great story is a great story and a truth on which to build others . I was happy to steal the mood and gravitas from this Epic for my more petty needs ! Glad you liked it and thanks again . W.  


  • shyam balaji
    April 16, 2006
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    great

    hai poet.This is a verry good piece, keep up the good work.the poem was touching.i just admired it. good luck.my best wishes for you become a good poet in future.pls comment on my poems.bye!!
    take care.

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