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Ode to Catatonia

Catatonia - A Crestfallen Zephyr skirled,
Voices of Melancholia, of Despair,
Void.
Traces of itself, Unworthy of Repair.
Catatonia Devoid.

Catatonia - A Sick Cycle.
Henceforth it blooms,
Till Augustus Looms,
Catatonia - My Lost Friend.

Void. Devoid.
It shreiks, screams, squeals
a sullen tune - Till Octobria, Till it wakes,
a Typhoon.

Catatonia - My Lost Friend.
How you sang a sorry tune,
Catatonia - Itself unworthy of Despair.
Catatonia devoid.



Author notes

Does not refer to catatonia the musician. Refers to Catatonia aka Depression.

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  • Wisdom 1
    November 13, 2007

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    clever

    since catatonia is the heading using it as repetition is profusely emphatic but at least twice isn`t


  • Ludmila607
    July 6, 2006
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    Wonderful....

    The poem it is  great.The words are just at their  place.The words are  just the right.Calculate or  not the poem says a lot in a few  words, because of the power of the words  you  used.It is touching almot hurting...brings  thrills and  cold images.It sounds great, it is one of the  best I ve read here.
    When  you finish reading it , you  just  gö: OH!
    The  most important here is languaje and  subject, the  poetic manner seem to be the  best to express  what  you  want.Great  job.

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  • gnosisonG silver member
    July 6, 2006
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    Sounds of the void evoked

    The heaviness of despair light as air is strongly evoked in your ode. I like the way you personalise the pain of insufferable depression and the ambivalence you portray within a state which although negative can be induced to inspire desperate creativity.Please forgive me for offering suggestions,but to maintain levity perhaps tune could be swapped for "dirge" in line 12,a wailing banshees lament for line 15? I liked the imagery of an ill-wind (zephyr) sounding like bagpipes (skirl)!

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