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Palestinian Suicide Bomber Girl.

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Palestinian Suicide Bomber Girl.

First of  Many.

She’s my Palestinian Suicide Bomber Girl.

This  ballad; less about her than a Cruel Sick World.

She thought soothing lunacy would numb her pain.

Yet her  dying breath remained excruciatingly sane.

It  touched me deeper how she died

Than  anyone alive.

What a  waste of lives, I cried!

More  futile twisting

of  serrated knives.

But  there’s no cut cuts deeper than the Reaper’s scythes

When  your people are corn only madness survives.

Only  madness survives.

No one’s  a civilian in a war against children.

No one’s  a civilian.

Everyone’s a victim.

She’s my  Palestinian Suicide Bomber Girl.

Round  the spine of endless time; a foetus curled.

Her  liquid eyes solidify the darkness of my soul.

I beg  the thieves return to her the innocence they stole.

In my  dreams she speaks but all I hear are sirens.

Bullets  ricochet. A carnival of screams.

Then  silence.

Wafa was  a medic where violence thrives on hate.

In a  battered ambulance that always arrived too late,

She  fought to fan a flicker of life in juvenile bones.

In her  sleep she’d always dream

Dead  children throwing stones.

Throwing  stones.

No such  thing as neutral.  Fear and loathing  mutual.

No such  thing as neutral.

Killing  becomes ritual.

With  sinews weave wet tapestries of chaos carnage wrought.

The  doomed, the damned, the desperate in webs of blood are  caught.

Gaza, the  bazaar where lost souls bartered for, are bought,

In  snipers sights harsh lessons of martyrdom are taught.

In a  gore drenched ambulance she strove to come to terms,

With the  shrapnel and bullet wounds that spread in flesh like  germs,

in the  bodies of the frontline kids; young heroes throwing  stones,

The  spirit of resistance is being fed by broken bones.

And as  the valiant Jews of Warsaw fought the Nazis long ago,

The  Powers That Be betray them to struggle, pray and die Alone.

Prey  dies alone.

She’s my  Palestinian Suicide Bomber Girl.

She saw  the bloody banner of insanity unfurl.

I weep  for her deeds.

I mourn  for her world.

And like  a spinning dervish ever higher she whirls.

A tragic  beacon;

                                                                                                                                                                        For  all

                                                                                                                                                                              Tomorrow’s

                                                            Palestinian

                                                                       Suicide

                                                            Bomber

                                                                                                                                                                                   Girls.                 

Author notes

Wafa Idris was the first female Palestinian suicide bomber, but not the first martyr. Or murderess.
The aspects of issues raised are myriad - coloured by suffering one and all. This poem attempts to present a snapshot of a few.
Wafa Idris was 28 years old, a volunteer ambulance medic. She wasn`t a religious vigilante, no fanatic.
She lived her whole life, rife with personal tragedy, in the midst of a war-zone and did her best to alleviate some of the suffering in abundance around her.
Her father died when she was a girl. Brothers were imprisoned.
She lost a baby, could no longer conceive, her marriage dissolved.
She killed an 83 year old man and wounded 100.
I can`t shake the the feeling, looking through a dead father`s eyes, that this could be
   my girl,
         your girl,
               anyone`s

Martyr or Murderess?

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Comments

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  • skipeople
    August 14, 2007

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    This is a very strongly spoken and strongly worded poem. It speaks truth about the war and suicidal bombings.

    I'm personally anti-war, but I support our troops and armies b/c I had/have family over there fighting as well. I mean my cousin has seen things that make me sick to think how we helped bring this on to them. Childern next to their ded parents, dogs feeding on human flesh, people being ran over by tanks, road-side bombings, and of course suicide bombings..only one, but it hit him hard.

    As this poem has hit me hard in the heart.
    Ashley

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  • Andrew Dornon
    May 12, 2007

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    Fantastic Poem

    This poem hits upon almost everything that is wrong with this war. It conveys the problems of both sides and shows how they ruin lives. The girl's tale is truly tragic, and it is not only a personal tragey like many deaths are. It is a tragedy for humanity because we all did this, we all took part in the killing.

    -Andrew Dornon

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    • gnosisonG silver member
      May 27, 2007
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      Cheers mate

      Such a tragedy that its ongoing and if anything getting worse, for the Palestinians.
      gG


  • Abdul Malik
    October 4, 2006
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    WOW

    I am Speechless


  • iphios silver member
    September 6, 2006
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    Neither. I find myself always in between, for i do not wanty to judge anyone for their actions. I have written my fair share on such matters (not necessarily poetry)...the problem lies in the fact that nations/relgions/ideologies want to impose on each other...always claiming ones own to be right. I condemn probably the world we live in...for what is is now is tragic in of itself.

    this poem was different...the words and the emotion is evokes. It is strong and yet sad. It screams to you these realities and yet at the same time wants you to stop and think. It challenges beliefs. I like how you repeat the lines...it tugs the soul further...

    but then how does one stop this? how does one bring peace to a land that has since in time of history has been plagued by conflict?

    someone once told me that do not ask about the death, but ask what it takes for a man/woman to volunteer her/himself to die (suicide) for a cause.

    thanks for writing about this...i greatly appreciate poetry that tells one of whats truly going on in the world.

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    • gnosisonG silver member
      September 6, 2006
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      cheers Iphios

      As always your comments supply food for thought and further contemplation.
      Thanx again,
      Warm regards,
      gG


  • himanshumodi
    September 6, 2006
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    Hmm... poems about social issues always hit me hard. ANd this one is one of the most important issue in the world today. The message however seems to get lost in stanza 6.

    The poem itself is quite difficult to read because of the structure. I guess you could try a simpler poem. I think that is important in a social poem because the social poem is more about the issue than poetic complexity and brilliance. because social poems should be understood by a 12 year old as well as an accomplished poet.

    Cheers.

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    • gnosisonG silver member
      September 6, 2006
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      A valid point, Himanshumodi

      The structure is disparate; more akin to seperate poems than one long whole. However I write mainly for myself I`m afraid and perhaps 12 year olds are anyway much more easily swayed by a simple picture than words. Social poems should also be open to nuance and various points of view aswell as relevant historical references. If one writes solely for a "12" year old mind then one is in danger of over-simplifying complex issues or at worst banal propaganda. In another poem "Concentrate Your Love" I do write in a much simpler fashion within a uniform structure, but the social issues there were much more black and white - good against evil and so forth. Here there are moral, political, aggressor versus victim, loss and sacrifice etc, that makes for a more intricate web of contemplative thoughts. A main theme could be for example: alienation, which I think with all respect Wafa Idris felt for of course Israeli brutality, but also within her own society which is wont to look down upon women who are divorced and who remain childless. I did wish also to highlight Wafa Idris`s plight in the context of Islamic society`s chauvenism towards women since this is purported to be one of the many possible reasons for her suicide bombing.
      Thanx so much for your comment, himanshumodi, as always thought-provoking.
      Regards,
      gG


  • August 28, 2006

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    Very Touching!

    especially for someone like me...a Muslim Arab living in the middle east,and hearing and watching daily reports of deaths and wonds never ending.This touched me to the bottom of my heart!!!Wonderful piece!

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    • gnosisonG silver member
      August 30, 2006
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      Thanx Ms Bliss

      It`s almost too depressing reading Electronic Intifada nowadays. The despicable bombing and atrocitys perpetrated on Lebanon has put the horrendous tragedy ongoing in Palestine on hold in the eyes of a mad world. Nothing seems to be done to counter Israeli war-crimes. How can one remain neutral?
      Thanx for the comment.
      Warm regards,
      gnosisonG

  • Terry-too
    August 27, 2006

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    Terrible truth

    Tragic it is, no question, and a terrible waste.  I guess we need to remember that views get skewed in a lifetime of animosity and acceptance of death.
    Generations have hardened hate, and both sides are called "infidels" and both sides think they have God in their pocket.

    As for military girls, women have long been part of our own military forces.  In other countries children are involved.

    Technically, meaning drives this poem, ramming its truth into even the the most complacent mind.  Powerfully written, chillingly true in its heritage of waste and pain, it is hopelessly set into an increasingly large part of the future we all share.
    It tells it as it is, and implies it is already beyond hope of improvement.

    It will remain with me for a long time.

    Terry

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    • gnosisonG silver member
      August 27, 2006
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      Thanx, Terry

      For the finely wrought comment.
      PSBG is a bit between two posts expression-wise with varying forms of narration. It`s almost like a bunch of smaller poems I feel. But since the overriding topic is so powerful the disparate elements are more efficaciously interwoven than might otherwise have been the case (hopefully!).
      The rhythmic thread winds somewhat back on itself but I soon found it beyond my present abilities to encase the declamatory nature of this piece within a more standard set form.
      The emotional content wouldn`t allow me to.
      Thanx again, Terry. Hope you`re doing well and it`s very nice to hear from you!
      Warmest regards
      gG


  • August 20, 2006

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    One of the best I've read, I wish I could give you a 6!

    This by far, is one of the best works I have read since I joined this site.  I love the angle you created here to show a view that many forget exists.  

    I thought your use of words here was masterful:

    With  sinews weave wet tapestries of chaos carnage wrought.
    The  doomed, the damned, the desperate in webs of blood are  caught.
    Gaza, the  bazaar where lost souls bartered for, are bought,
    In  snipers sights harsh lessons of martyrdom are taught.


    I think this was one of the first things I have read by you, I look forward to reading more of your work!

    Thank you,
    Shawn

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    • gnosisonG silver member
      August 20, 2006
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      Cheers DSM

      I was a little apprehensive upon posting this piece. Thanx to you and others here for allaying my fears.
      I`ve read thru your works which are highly adept, well thought through and finely crafted. Will comment shortly.
      Regards,
      gnosisonG


  • wilderness
    August 16, 2006

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    tragically beautiful

    wow.
    this was a great read on a painfully important subject. war is a terrible terrible thing and i agree with you most on the fact that in a war against children, no one is a civilian. your execution of the subject was timely and beautiful. almost personal.

    it is ironical that she had dedicated her life to saving other people but ended up killing. perhaps this was her way of freeing herself (from her painful past and an even worse present) and pitching in to liberate her countrymen from the clutches of oppression. was it a waste of life?  loss of a dedicated citizen? unfortunate? maybe. eye opening? a story that'll stun us out of our sleep and shock us enough to listen and understand the actual extent of this war? definately.

    personally, the extent of the zionist power's oppression is heart wrenching.but the most angering thing is that the plight of children and youth such as Wafa who have had to go live lives engulfed in such misery and disorder goes unnoticed as people are more concerned with power and supremacy. when will it all end? will it ever?

    but thanks to guys like you, others are informed and sensitized. i am a strong believer in the power of the pen, keep writing.
    sincerely, Wilderness

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    • gnosisonG silver member
      August 16, 2006
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      Appreciate your comment.

      Thank you. Originally this was meant as a lyric to a piece of electronica. I penned the initial lines at a musician friends house. The song will never be completed, as my friend has since died of an overdose. Another sad irony. Life is full of them I suppose but some people just have far too many than they could possibly ever deserve! Palestinian lives are so replete with suffering it`s heart-rending. I recommend the web-site Electronic Intifada for an alternate viewpoint on the Oppression to our back-sliding, spineless, money-led, vested-interest Western media.
      Thanx again
      Regards,
      gG


      • wilderness
        August 16, 2006
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        i'm truly sorry to hear of your friend. thanks for the heads up on the electronic intifada website(it has a wealth of info).it's a breath of fresh air from the one sided hypocritical reporting of western media.
        Wilderness    

  • Frank E Gibbard
    August 11, 2006
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    Quite a work this cleverly done and engrossing.Frank

  • dave ochs silver member
    August 9, 2006
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    great commentary and delievery

    you truly illuminate the tragedy without taking sides which is in itself a tragedy, because taking sides perpetuates the violence.

    it seems superflous to comment on the poem in light of the subject.
    dave

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  • Windhover silver member
    August 9, 2006

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    So well said and so worth saying

    Your skill here is , as always, beyond question. Your chosen image is , as always, poignantly tragic. Some of the rhyming is quite sublimely subtle. But is anybody listening ? Alas I fear not , certainly not those who are killing or being killed. No doubt an idealistic Wafa had time for poetry some time before she foresook her post as a paramedic and would-be saviour to hurl her last breath at the monster she perceived as her persecutor and that of her people. I would have liked to see you deal with an issue you  touched upon ( just ) - that of Israel become the monster that persecuted its people not seventy years ago. And might not the Palestinians follow suit in exactly the same way should they ever manage to miraculously turn the tables on fascist super-power that now oppresses them ? Is mankind capable of really learning anything about civilization beyond the superficial? Aren't we all deeply self-destructive and basically f***ed ? Beautifully depressing stuff.
    On a technical note , I wondered about the capital on 'Pray' in the penultimate verse. I realize of course my learned friend is probably making a statement but it costs a lot to the flow of the poem where power is surely more important than subtlety. Similarly I'm afraid I found the play with word- placement in the final lines a little frivolous , even though I think I 'get' the 'blown to bits' idea. Minor flaws in an otherwise great write ( as usual)        >W<

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    • gnosisonG silver member
      August 9, 2006
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      Hi Windhover

      Yes, the role of a poet is to seek the deeper lines running beneath the senseless and try to incur a meaning in meaningless.
      My personal views are far more strident on the side of Palestine`s plight than that of their zionist oppressors, but I didn`t want it to colour the poem overly much.
      Each stanza beginning with "She`s my..."etc attempts to portray thru the dead father`s pov. The others are more a general narrators.
      I`m not quite done with this (espec. rhythm, capitals) so I`ll look at Prays. as for the final dispersed discourse, it was originally in the shape of an inverted crescent (red crescent/cross her employers) but it kind of blew up.
      Thank you once more for excellent comments, Worthy Windhover!
      Cheers,
      gG

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