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Both Ends Burn towards Placenta.

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I`m Nero playing the violin

While Rome is burning.

We burn slow but we`re learning.

Incandescent shells;

We leave our private hells

To go where our love is still the most precious thing.

At the foot of Versuvius vomiting

Pompeii is panicking.

Beautiful  mindshards shattering.

Is this Terminus?

The bitter End of Us?

Crashed lives never rise whilst helter- skeltering.

The Demon we are constantly summoning

Teaches us suffering

Heart of dark to bury a lover in.

Nothing is painless

But lovers are blameless,

Like the child we hide whose cries we are smothering

Carcass of our past malnourishing.

I`m Babylon  flourishing.

In loves ruins we`re wraiths foraging.

Pale things blossom

In our microcosm.

Hallucinate a new world as the old one is vanishing.

A bridge over bitterness weeping.

Dream we are sleeping.

Foetal genes drown breast-feeding.

Ghostwishes we haunt

Waste all that I want,

In our slaughter-house cum castle-keep to count sheep in.

I`m jesus wearing a crown of thorns

Hiding my devil horns, 

For shy messiahs in uniforms. 

The higher we grow 

The darker they glow. 

The laughing buddha weeps for those no-one ever mourns. 

Both ends burn towards placenta.

I pray at a temple I cannot enter.

Upon the cusp
of disaster

We live a little faster.

Though your fear may be mastered

I know I`m    still a bastard.

I never meant to.

She broke when I bent her.

Spawn of a monster - Dad`s a mad inventor:

An "I" in a sighclone;

but no placid centre,

That ties

the bind of cords umbilical.

Love atrophies; we become cynical.

Intercourse clinical.

Everyday we let slip away more o th miracle.

Both ends return to scent her,

Where nothing is as we remember.

I`m Nero playing the violin

Rome is burning...

Author notes

Ever get that feeling? When in Rome...

When both ends burn what do you do?

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  • mr backwards
    August 30, 2006
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    YUM!

    this was a pleasure to read. I love the historical and spiritual symbolism, using the ancient past to represent a bizarre feeling.
    It's hard to get a handle on, but to good to let slip out of your fingers.
    this is very good lingually. keep up the good work.

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    • gnosisonG silver member
      August 30, 2006
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      Cheers, Mr Backwards

      The feeling I`m attempting within my poor means to portray is one of helplessness as events circumscribe ones choice of action. So why not at least entertain oneself while everything goes to Hades. The historical references I hope give the feel of an age-old interminable conflict betwixt apposite parts.
      The placenta being of course the one link/centrepoint that binds us physically to another lifeforce (umbilically speaking).
      Thanx once again for your comment. It is much appreciated.
      Warm uterine regards,
      gnosisonG


  • VanitaVarsha
    August 26, 2006
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    wonderful

    very historical, giving life to facts, to places that are old and we don't know what to make of them. i love it, the ending done as the beginning, the ..., making you think you gotta think. it mixes the people like nero (which most people don't know who that is) with the we live a little faster, a personal touch, a truth inside the writer, the sides of things. i don't know. i love it, i wouldn't change anything. it gets kindof confusing the first time you read it, but just read it again. it's a keeper.

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    • gnosisonG silver member
      August 26, 2006
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      Thanx VanitaVarsha

      Yes, I`m afraid this piece might well require more than one read-through. Thank you for having the patience to do so. I really appreciate it.
      Regards
      gG


  • amb0274
    August 22, 2006
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    Amazing.

    I absolutely adore the way you manage to combine sometimes subtle and sometimes direct historical references with astounding imagery. This poem reveals a very mature and refined grasp of your own linguistic faculties. A joy to read.

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  • Windhover silver member
    August 15, 2006

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    Marriage ..

    .. is a much maligned and underestimated institution and I'm surprised I don't see it written about here more often. Why I choose to mention this now may be a total mystery to you - my 'antennae' have been at the dry cleaners and they've been acting up lately. Regardless , each reader will filter it as he will and this works particularly well to my way of thinking.
    As usual I can find little or no fault with the workmanship here. Technically you are the best I've seen here and your mastery of the language and breadth of knowledge is put to good use in this one. It's tone is almost humorous at times

    ( Is this Terminus?
    The bitter End of Us? )

    Laughs in Latin - what next !

    At others however it's distinctly dark in your stylishly dark way

    Waste all that I want,
    In our slaughter-house cum castle-keep to count sheep in.


    I`m jesus wearing a crown of thorns
    Hiding my devil horns,

    Were I not familiar with the breadth of your empathetic powers I'd be worried about you!

    It has mischief and pathos and each is carefully camouflaged.For me it took off at line 47 ( An "I" in a sighclone;  -  brilliant ) and ran from there to the end with an eloquent exposition of the eternal dilemma of the conjugated.
    I wonder is there a Vesuvius in Phoenix ?
    Only you could come up with a title like this and an image to outdo its distastefulness. If your intellect doesn't scare us away you'll find another way it seems. But like most scavenging aviators I have a strong stomach and it will take more than this to get me off your carcass. Keep fiddling.       >W<
     

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    • gnosisonG silver member
      August 16, 2006
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      Nail on the Noggin

      Yepp. I was starting to worry I`d been too obtuse so I greatly appreciate the reassurance by your hitting it spot on, mate.
      "This time it`s personal"
      And personal is often conjugal.
      I`m Zero playing with poetry, and Rome Sweet Rome(is where the heart is) is definitely exuding a burnt-rubber pong.
      I worked long and hard with the rhythm, but perhaps it`s only perfect in my head (like everything else). I`ll sighn off before I get too maudlin, Windhover.
      But then, ya gotta laugh. Heh h...
      Warm mawkish regards
      Sniff!
      proboscisonG


  • LAS Poetry
    August 15, 2006

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    Unclear

    I don't want to seem ( for the lack of a better word ) ignorant on the meaning of this poem but really i did have to read it a few times and still was unclear. It almost seems as if it discribes the downfall of our (mother) earth but i am really not sure. I loved the imagination put forward in this you have an awsome vocabulary.

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    • gnosisonG silver member
      August 15, 2006
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      Partially Ignorant

      Downfalls of a personal and relationary nature should, I contend, be relatively obvious to "decipher" and comment upon here.
      Thanx for your kind words concerning the vocab and imagination but if you find my style and efforts too confusing, too beyond the "small" so to speak, please request elucidation of pertinent areas of cerebral contention and I shall do my best to clarify, otherwise kindly refrain.
      gG  

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