Night and the dreams

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  dearchicago
  May 28
  
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  I've seen your very critical comments on other people's work though it was very difficult to make out what you were saying due to the incredibly bad grammar.
  
  I have to agree with Dave Ochs, that given this kind of work you have no right to tear down other people's work.
  
  This poem is Hallmark crap and please, please cut the text message language (i.e. ur, r)

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  CinfullyDelicious
  May 27
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  This really to me didn't have a how lot of poetic substance, poetic flow...it felt more like a diary entry on your thoughts on dreams. I am sorry but would always be honest...This is soemthing that could be taken so far in my opinion..a great start
  
  
  
  Cindy

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• dave ochs
  May 27
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  hey cactus

  you have the nerve to call my poem pathetic and post this weak Hallmark drivel, i see you got some nice compliments but i think the good people here on sharepoetry said them only out of politeness and pity, lame through and through and if your going to use text message then just send it to friends (if you have any) and family and spare us from this lameness.
  
  dave
• tanith
  May 27
  
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  I thought this was an interesting subject matter but form wise, I'm not 100%. I agree that some of the rhymes are a little forced, and I should know because its probably my main criticsm of my own poetry. But some of the ideas in it are great; I especially like the idea that "Dreams are the facts / that never get betrayed."
  

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  Butterfly Beauty
  December 9, 2007
  
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  This sounds so much like me...where would we be without our dreams? Life is good for me right now, but I do tend to let my mind wander off while I'm doing my job to dreams that I can only wish would come true. I agree, they ought to be fulfilled! My favorite part is:
  
  “ Life
  is always
  easy to live
  hard to bear ”
  
  That has been true more times than I want to remember. I agree it is from what angle you see it.
  
  I like the format of this because besides the truth and beauty of your words, the way you have it arranged is pretty to look at. One line I think is very powerful, and may be overlooked, is "ur deeds are the theme". That's a powerful statement. I like this very much and enjoy the talent that went into it. Nice write.
  
  Butterfly
  
  

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  purple esprit
  August 7, 2007
  
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  Very good and lovely poem and it has moved me for everybody is wishing "sweet dreams" an so often the night gets interrupt by nightmares... The more I think about your poem the more it stirs thoughts, thank you!
  Ulla
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  purple esprit
  August 4, 2007
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  "It is from what angle u see it my dear
  Dreams r the songs"
  Excellent poem, dreams are much more than we pay attention to them, they are the silent talks of our soul and express our subconsciousness. Your quoted lines are just fact. Thank you! -Ulla
  
  
  
• Bailiwick
  June 20, 2007
  
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  You have a good sound going, here, though some of the rhymes seem a little forced (Lines 4-7 stuck out to me).
  
  I would also strongly suggest that you actually spell out words like "are" and "your." Some poets say it's an expression of the age we live in, but somehow that's never cut it for me. It seems to me that since poetry is, at its core, about the language, a poet should show a certain amount of respect for the language. Plus, you lose a lot of the sense of whole-ness and effort about a poem if you start chopping things down to AIM-speak.

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  adorasmum
  June 12, 2007
  
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  So true

  Very well written and solid poem.
  
  I liked the subject-dreams do assist you in working out your whole self. As I have very vivid dreams I do wonder whether they mean anything but then again i have obvious dreams and I grab several themes from whatever was bugging my consious self during the day. WHO KNOWS!!!
  
  I liked the tone and structure of the poem. Very well done.
  

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  deep inside
  May 26, 2007
  
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  positive and strong

  I am reading your poems after a long time. I am glad i read this one. Positivity and a sublte yet deep pattern of your words flows really well.
  I really liked it.
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  suchme
  May 5, 2007
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  U make me dream

  I like it a lot...It is so positive and emit so much energy, positive I mean. If I was able to give the pain to the night I would be much more happy than now... However this is very good poem

  
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  Kiddy
  November 13, 2006
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  I could dream a dream....

  ...of giving my pain to night, so that I can feel light! Wonderful! Dream is vision for someone, nightmare for few, unfulfilled desires coming true moment for others, dream is dream for only a few!
  I love poems about dream and yours too!
  Let your dream come true!
  Keep delighting us with more like this....
  Wishes,
  KC

  
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  Kiddy
  November 13, 2006
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  Icould dream a dream....
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  mr backwards
  November 13, 2006
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  oh, of dreams and nightmares...

  this is a delishious peice. one thing you might want to fix are just mechanics: you're instead of ur, you= u,r=are, etc.
  other than that, WOW! dreams are fearfully deep and insightful. sometimes, however, we dont like what we see when we look inside.
  and that is the hardest thing to change.
  very nice, sir cactus.

  
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  scribbledthoughts
  September 2, 2006
  
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  I believe, it is!

  I've always thought what you dream at night is an offshoot of your desires or frustrations. And these desires stem from one's deeds, exactly.
  Have sweet dreams as well!
  Lynne

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  Lonely Traveller
  August 30, 2006
  
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  Good write

  The ryhming pattern is good ---- the subject is awesome ---- the thing you said about bearing and living life is a very deep and awesome thought ---- but sometimes bearing is more important and fruitful than living of free will --- different people different views ---- good write --- keep writing
  
  Always
  Traveler

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  mr backwards
  August 30, 2006
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  dreams...

  are different for everyone, and so is the way we react to them. i think you're talking less about your dreams here and more about a significant other's.  People's reactions to dreams and their feelings towards them can be strange (I once didn't sleep for a week because i was afraid to dream about a girl who broke my heart, whom i dreamt of reccouringly).
  Dreams can be an escape or a taunting. thought provoking.

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• emma cameron
  August 28, 2006
  
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  Not too sure

  I liked much of this poem
  "Give your pain to the night"..especially
  Maybe because of my age I can't identify with your almost mobile phone text language and think the poem would be better without it.However that is just my opinion and others may disagree.
  Regards Emma

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  August 25, 2006
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  cute

  i like this poem its so sweet simple and kinda cute...very rare subject to write abt ...nice one keep it up

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