- Member since April 23, 2009.
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Vincent St James on April 23, 2009i could tell whoever posted this poem just joined this site. shoppin it around. i know how it is. i got u. it's got a lot of words that begin with the same letter. theyve got a word for that over at harvard i think. i think a nucluer physisist at harvard recently invented a word for this phenomina in a poem- the same sound beginning numerous words in a line. i think its onomotopia or hyperbole or endjambment or something. or maybe the word is baseball card shop. maybe the word is television repairman. maybe the word is IBM Laptop resting on a dead mands forhead. i can't remember the name for it. but yeah, lots of sounds and things in this poem. it sounds like the rice i ate for dinner. and boy, do i ever love rice.
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on Homecoming Rose by Soulless., on April 25, 2009
Like a snapshot
... good read on your emotion of the moment. I did however question your choice of first word. Glaring sounds angry. I also think you meant slicked back not slicked by.
language: 2, rhythm: 3, subject: 2, tone: 3, form: 3.
This stands on its own
However, I was pleasantly surprised when I read the link you provided. I realized the way your poem echoed its inspiration. Maybe the two poems should be presented together as a poetic dialog. It was interesting to me that I recognized your poem as a list without first reading "If I." Afterwards I understood why you seemed to list these things.