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  • on Welcome Home by NikkiR, on January 11, 2006

    good twist

    at first i thought this was about when you hear of people passing on the street when you need help and they just keep walking. i wasnt expecting such a twist at the end and you are so right it does feel like that with family at times. very well written

    language: 3, rhythm: 4, subject: 5, tone: 5, form: 4.

  • on Murky Depths by Eruvande Almare, on September 22, 2005

    very good

    i think the last verse was the best as it brings the whole thing together quite nicely. if you could have injected some pace into the middle part to portray the fight and struggle it would have built up to a nice climatic end where peace and tranquility was gained. very good

    language: 3, rhythm: 3, subject: 4, tone: 4, form: 5.