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  • Brian Balzer : Hey Samets3 on October 6
    Welcome to sharepoetry. I hope you enjoy your stay. It's a pretty queit neighborhood. Everyones fairly friendly. I look forward to reading your poetry. If you have any questions feel free to holler.
    BKB

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  • on Writer’S Impotency by dave ochs, on October 7
    i really love your analogy but i feel like you are letting the analogy be the poem instead of the poem with an analogy. I think if you develop the lines more the comparison will seem more subtle without changing the perspective and enhance the read, props for being clever!

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  • on mojojames by Brian Balzer, on October 7
    interesting...although it is clever and sort of witty, your tone makes me wonder if you are being serious or just joking around, im going to assume it is serious in which case i would recommend maybe a little more developed lines, i agree with LCJ that it kind of feels more like a sing a long song then a poem, if you are serious about it though it definitively has potential

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