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A Letter To My Team

Girls, / Were at the commencement of a season new- / A year from the time we were together last. / In the year we all changed and I know we

183 words, 1 comment, August 23. In Sports, Pain, Inspirational, Family. Reward
I Remember

I made you a promise when we were young- / Put my word in a bottle claimed by the lake / With my heart, and weighed by all my love that is yours. / I swore I would never forget those times; / The hot summer in the south when we found ourselves

211 words, 1 comment, August 22. In Love. Reward
Fault Line

One choice cannot be the end of it all/But I must choose or choose to fall.

183 words, June 10

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on Gone are the days by charlottesarah, on August 25
I really like the interesting way you told a story in your poem. I have a suggestion- The 4th line in the first stansa sticks out, so perhaps you could change it to "When I knew what you gave me was there to hide under." That would make more sense to me. Good job.
on The Garden Hangs by GmH, on August 22
The poem is interesting and unique. It's a little awkward to read because of the sparatic rhyming. It prevented me from really feeling the flow of the poem. In the line "They glare and stare...at it," I really think it would still get your point across if you took away the "at it." Other than that I liked the humor and the picture created by the poem.