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  • on We'll Rain Blood On Your Parade by StarsFallForUs, on March 5, 2009

    Wow!

    Nice, write, i Love your metaphorical speakings, it's deep and profound of where our nature faces hardship, because of one mistake.

    Beautiful!!

    language: 5, rhythm: 4, subject: 5, tone: 4, form: 5.

  • on Untitled by -CrimsonTears-, on March 4, 2009

    dramatic

    I see this as a release of emotion to a person, of raw emotions rather than of structure and built, but yeah as you know that's how i write.

    This is also hits to the soul, in how alot of people feel frustrated, with their lives and they dont' want to change. I empathize with your point a lot.

    The stanzas are well stood for, the symbolic meaning of the pills being only locked up in a bottle only to be consumed later on and changed for the sake of someone else is a good metaphor.

    Very interesting, thanks for the write!