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  • on Twilight Speaks To Night by Lad, on August 18, 2007
    1- "I breathe snares at your neck?" What does that mean? Makes no sense to me
    2- really like this
    3- I like this, but wish the ! and "now" were not there
    4- "how coming black attacks please you?" I read the explanation, but--

    5- "I'll subside
    lie soft
    and wait...."
    (best part of this short poem)

    Overall, I like parts, parts are perfect
    I hate parts and found them overwrought.
    At least I had an opinion I guess!

  • on Broken by SweetAngelKitten, on August 18, 2007
    im--> I'm

    I'm sorry to hear that you are so sad. Love is hard. Time goes by and you love again and even that is hard too. Hopefully you'll be able to file this away soon and write about the magic of falling in love again--this time with the right person.